All Blacks vs Ghosts
Once upon a time there was three men named Dan carter, who was really speedy. Another man was named Richie mccaw, who was as strong as a grizzly bear. Next is a person named Aaron cruden, he was as tall as a tree. They stayed in a dark sandy forest every night were they smelt dead Animals.The house was haunted and weird singing ghosts were in the old house. They all heard the hard rain tumbling down to the ground so they decided to go and take a look at the scary old house. tip top tip top they quietly walked in suddenly the ghost shut the door slam! the door shut they were all scared.After that Dan carter said quietly let's play a game of league if we win we get freedom Dan carter said.The ghosts agreed so they set the field up together and when they saw each other they noticed that they should not vs each other.So all of the rugby players started to sew they said do you want to play a game of league now.So they all played a real long game of league they had the same amount of players in each team but the all blacks lost but the ghoasts said you can still run free.Because you gies taught us how to play rugby.
Hey nice story but you should re-read to check if there's any mistakes.Like speech bubbles,comer those sorts of things.
ReplyDeleteGreat story Kaedun you have really used some great simileys like Aron cruden was as tall as a tree and Richie Mccaw was as strong as a grizzly bear.Next time make sure that somebody checks your work and sorry dude the all blacks play super 15.
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